Project A.D.I.O.L Final demo

Sorry rav, I'm NOT going to download this one, mainly because I'm not in it yet ( )
But also because your games kill my internet download amount or whatever it's called, so soz.
But I'll download the finished one with the cameos and everything in it.

I'll give your project a shot whenever I'm done making my deadly homework rounds tonight. O_o

"Apparently there's been an issue where the player cannot move at all
making the demo impossible to clear...."

LOL!!! :lol3:

I played the first twenty minutes of it and got halted. (downloading the fix right now though.)

So far, I think the game is pretty good.

Besides the occasional fun little typos and out-of-place things, dialogue is good...but the story seems to feel as though it moves pretty fast.

There's nice little bits of humor everywhere, keeping me entertained, and there's no grinding. Nice.

The battle system text is useful, as the default battle system wasn't very informing...

The flash intro is pretty epic. It would lay waste to many good intros made completely with RMXP eventing.

Is the title screen also a flash movie? Either that, or nice scripting on making it look and operate as it does.

So far, while maps and events feel a bit choppy, I think the game is in good standing here. I would want to download this game when it's been finished.

*commences rejoicing *

Will download now, even if there is no show and tell.

Some music playing, blank screen.

Oh here's the right, I just only loaded a saved game anway. Works.

I've begun playing your demo, and I had an urge to 'play-test' it, meaning I wrote down discrepancies I found throughout my playthrough, but it interferes with my enjoyment of the game so I only wrote what I found to be wrong with some things up to the point where you find the key in the Zircon deposit in the abandoned tunnel.

Here goes:

Play-testing A.D.I.O.L. Final Demo

-         Intro music for the animated cut scene when starting a new game is pretty terrible. (Also cuts out abruptly at the end, it should fade out instead)

-         Girl near 7 barrels: Correction – “Hmm, you’re looking for al leaf?” (Al should be a)

-         Monologue: Correction – “I remember there weren’t so many people on the park.” (On should be in)

-         Circular menu is a nice touch.

-         Item obtaining - should show the item’s icon in the text box when the item is obtained, or even above the character’s head.

-         Punctuation and capitalization problems with the items’ descriptions.

-         Sesilou’s name in the Skills tab has a period at the end of his name.

-         Top right map name is a nice touch.

-         Breaking objects – The animation is too large for the character; change its size. Also, change the objects disappearing to the objects fading out with a damage sound effect.

-         Objects on the map could use more flavour text instead of being plain background props.

-         Sister in the house: Correction – “I’ll show you on my room.” (On should be in)

-         After the explosion during the night: Correction – “Hey sis we should check it out!” “Fine, but I’m coming too.” (Last sentence is completely useless.)

-         The system messages like party members joining, or item acquisitions: Change them from all caps to normal sentences.

-         Sesilou’s sister should have a name from the beginning if she does get one in the game.

-         Battle Memo: Correction – As mankind journeys into the unknown (should have a comma here) it is most likeley(spelled likely) to enconter (spelled encounter) hostilities along the way…

Let’s call these “encounters”. (Find another word for ‘encounter’ in the past phrase, because it just does not sound good at all.)

When someone gets a (should be ‘into a’) random encounter (should have a comma here) his mind acts on instinct.

Attack: The primary instinct of any battle (should have a comma here) attacking is one of the man ways of dealing damage to opponents (should have a period here)

Damage done is depending of (would be better as ‘depends on’) the weapon equipped plus (would be better as ‘as well as’) the person’s strengh (is spelled strength).

If a person has high luck stats, his chances of dealing 3 times the damage may increase drastically. let’s (Needs capitalization) call this event “criticals” (needs a period)

Skills: The secondary instinct. (Should be ‘second’ and not ‘secondary’)

When attacking just wont (should be won’t) work ou.t (should be out, and needs a comma) the person reaches within itself. (Should be themselves, doesn’t need the period there) for personal abilities (needs a period here)

Thes (should be these) abilities are dubbed as skills. each (needs to be capitalized) person has certain skills (needs a comma) some may be common as some may be unique (needs a period)

All skills drain the person’s XP. XP is both the mental and physical power to apply these skills. No XP no skills….

Items: when (needs capitalization) a person has limited skills or a lack of XP and (or) is under extreme conditions (should be changed to circumstances), as part of a survival instinct (no period at the end, and the sentence feels like it’s horribly fragmented)

The person might as well check his items and see what he has to ease his situation (needs a period)

It is recommended for the player (you’re beginning to switch between this being a teacher’s explanation and an instruction manual, choose the player or a person) not to hesitate in using items for the survival of others, power lies in numbers fellow readers.  (This is honestly getting confusing)

Defend: The defensive stance is as important as fighting is. as (Needs capitalization) this instinct can reduce a vast amount of damage (needs a period)

If a player has a high defense, any damage done when defending is reduced at 50% in many cases. (Unless this is an implemented battle mechanic, I would suggest leaving out the specific numbers and leave it a little more vague)

Do not underestimate the power of defending as in certain cases it can reduce any amount of damage to zero (needs a period)

If the person is lucky. (Change the period for a comma) the defensive stance can even block and reflect completeley (spelled as completely) any elemental magic.

Victory terms. (Suggest changing it from all caps to normal sentence, and change the period for a colon ‘:’)

If the person defeats all enemies while still having any HP the battle is won. (Remove the ‘while still having any HP’ part it’s redundant.)

Some battles require a (Doesn’t need ‘a’) survival of a certain number of turns in order to win.

Defeat…. (Change from all caps to normal, and change the periods for a colon ‘:’)

If all members in a party are K,O’ed (change to KO’d) or unable to act permanently it’s a game over. (Change ‘it’s a game over’ to them being defeated.)

Ok so now that you know how to fight properly (needs a comma) go out there and kick some ass!

(I am completely confused as to whether or not this is a memo from a scientist, a teacher, or something, because it moved from it being a study in the beginning to just being a manual for learning how to play the game in the end. Also, I would highly suggest changing the commands from ‘Instincts’ to ‘Commands’ if you’re going to stick to the manual aspect of this memo, or ‘Abilities’ if it’s the teacher/scientist’s memo, because using an item isn’t what people would call an instinct.)

-         Correction for the Paranormal text:

-         Safetey is spelled Safety.

-         Throught is spelled through.

-         Surruonded is spelled Surrounded.

-         Iniciative is spelled initiative, but I would suggest ‘Pre-emptive’ since initiative doesn’t mean the same thing.

-         Glitch: You can walk on top of the table in Sesilou’s room if you move up to it from the bottom.

-         Inside the house before going outside in the night: Start the rain sound effect when they’re inside still, it adds a gradual effect to the suspense.

-         Conversation before going in the diner: ‘but there’s no prints left… (I don’t understand this sentence, and if it’s to do with prints, not only is it a public entrance so there’d be a lot of people going in and out, but the rain would have washed the prints away already.)

‘there (needs to be capitalized) SHOULD be persons (should be ‘people’) at this time of the night (should be a period here)’

‘But I can only hear silence in the air….’ (You can’t hear silence, you could change it to ‘But it’s too quiet in there.’ Or something similar.)

‘No… it’s too quiet. even (Capitalization) for a common thief….’

-         “Hey! where’d you get these?” (Captalization)

-         Anomaly with the SP: On the Dr. Pepper and in the Battle Memo it states magic points as XP, but on the Ether it states it as SP.

-         Chef in the Diner: “He’s on some sort of shock.” Should be ‘in some’.

-         Letter: “The date’s extremeley old” should be ‘extremely’.

-         “Hmm According to this letter” According should be ‘according’, no period. “Obviousley” should be ‘obviously’.

-         “it was dubbed as “atlus”” it Needs to be capitalized, there’s a period missing, and I remember Atlus from Dark Cloud. Maybe a better name?

I've just gone through what is possibly the most trying part of your demo.

Once you go through the second gate, into the 'North Maze', there is an area with apparently 10 Pillars, each with a 'undead assassin' guarding it. Being the completionist that I am, I decided to slay every one I could find, totaling to 9 pillars. The man blocking my path at the bottom gave me the task of killing 10 ghosts, the aptly named undead assassins, and then to return to him.

Suffice it to say that after over a half hour of tedious, repetitive, and not to mention aggravating, movement all across the map time and time again, I found that there is either one pillar missing from your map, making it impossible to continue, or that there is some sort of secret that of which I know nothing about.

Also:

The monster encounter rate for such a quest is much too high, taking it down by five steps is the least that could be done.

Another way to ease this is to create a 'Travel Bell' item, something that keeps monsters at bay for a certain amount of steps. (100 steps is often used in most games such as Tales of Phantasia and whatnot.)

Making the undead assassins appear only after speaking to the guard at the southern end of the maze would be prudent, this way there is no bandying about for over a half hour, then losing roughly an hour and a half of gameplay because there is no way to save at all after going into that area.

Speaking of which, the way to the previous Net warp (and the rest of the maps) is gone, and once I went into that area, I was trapped with what provisions I had brought with me and no way to save my progress. I would suggest a save point in the center or at the top of the map near the grave of the 'newbie swordsman'.

All in all, that particular dungeon and quest need a lot of work for it to be enjoyable to a player. It is definitely not something I enjoyed, at least not after spending so much time and then to just lose all of that.

For the bell item, there's a helpful little event command called "Encounter rate" or something, just flick it to disabled for 100 steps (using variables).